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Emily is in ELL level 3!!!
Author’s Spotlight-Emily
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– December 8, 2010
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This is Miss P. Emily is now in the 5th grade class all the time so I”m not sure she is watching the blog. The teacher in this picture with Emily is Mrs. Bartels.
Is that picture Mrs.Tracy ?
I like your drawing.
No. I don’t like rolling down but I like jumping down
Paw Yea Moo is 8 or 9 years old.
How old is Paw Ya Mu? I like your pictures and slid .
What an enthusiastic story! I loved your word choice. It sounds like you all had a wonderful time even with your minor injuries!
Miss Birdsall
I liked the part about the slide.
Emily!
I can’t believe your English! You are writing like a pro! Here is what I saw/heard in your story…
I heard dialogue; good writers add dialogues to their stories to make it more fun and interesting to readers.
Great word choices! You used the work “rough” to describe the slide textures and “collided” instead of bumped…nice work!
The organization was great, I could follow your story from beginning to end. The transition words really help.
Your pictures are very artistic and a great complement to your writing.
Finally, I was glad that Paw Yeah Moo was Ok in the story ☺
Thanks for sharing this Emily. You are a hard working student and it shows!
I like the part when fell on Eh Tee Day and laughed . Do you like to roll down the slide?
What a wonderful story! I really liked all of the describing words like “collided, huge, and rough.” Super word choice! I can’t wait to read more from you!